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I wrote a Firefly ficlet!

Title: Touched, or Eight Fragments
Pairing: Inara, gen
Rating: PG
Spoilers: Vague ones for the television show; none for the movie
Warnings: None
Thanks to [livejournal.com profile] lisatheobscure and my hubby Josh for the read throughs; also [livejournal.com profile] executrix for inspiration on the narrative construction.

This is the first fic for this fandom, so, Eeeeep!

Touched, or Eight Fragments



Inara runs a brush slowly through Kaylee’s newly trimmed hair. The strands are soft, silky as her own, even though they smell slightly of exhaust under the warm honey of Kaylee’s shampoo. Inara twists the hair into a thick rope and fastens it with bronze clips.

“There we are. All finished, and beautifully so. Take a look.” Inara holds a mirror in front of Kaylee whose eyes widen as she tentatively pats the coil of hair looping across her crown and down behind her left ear.

Then Kaylee smiles. “You made me look so . . . just, so. Thanks, Inara. I feel like I oughta be dancing at a fancy party, instead of spending the night up to my elbows in hydraulics.” Kaylee scrunches her face up thoughtfully. “Well, maybe not. That one the Cap’n took me to wasn’t what I expected. Best part was really the melted cheese.” Kaylee shakes her head and turns to give Inara a quick hug before leaving.

Inara picks up a section of hair from the floor and ties it in the middle with a grosgrain ribbon. Then she sweeps the remainder into a dustpan and empties it down the trash chute.

~ ~ ~

Jayne leans toward Inara, a precious hunk of bread clutched in his hand like a stone he might throw. His feet are bare because River filled his boots with water and hid them in the cargo bay until the leather swelled and warped into an unwearable shape. Underneath the table, one foot slips under the hem of Inara’s embroidered gown. For the briefest instant, Jayne’s big toe traces a cold line along her shin. Then Inara takes the kitten heel of her morning slipper and brings it down on his other foot, hard. Jayne yelps and drops the bread into his soup; the steaming broth stings Inara’s wrist where it splashes.


~ ~ ~

“She’s just insanely hard to buy for. At some point, a man has to move beyond the traditional birthday gift basket of daggers and assorted grenades.” Wash sighs and slouches back in the pilot’s chair. “I just want to get her something different this year.”

“Don’t worry. We’ve got three days on Persephone, and I only have one engagement for this layover. I’ll help you find something perfect before we leave,” Inara says.

The next afternoon in the market, Inara presses the flat of her palm against bolt after bolt of sun-warmed linen. Her fingers skim over the tooling on supple leather saddles and wide gun belts. She ducks as Wash parts the colored streamers that hang from each vendor’s stall and distracts him with plastic figurines when he threatens to give up the search.

When he finds what he wants—a tiny wooden box inlaid with bits of colored glass and stone —Wash grabs Inara’s arm frantically, betraying his excitement and upping the asking price by at least ten percent. Back on Serenity, Inara helps Wash wrap Zoe’s gift, laughing when he manages to tape the fringe of her shawl inside the paper.

~ ~ ~



Inara’s hand is on Simon’s arm. His shirt is stiff under her fingers, the starched fabric unpleasant against her fingernails. She leaves her hand there just long enough so that the cotton begins to warm beneath it. Then she rests her hand in her lap and waits for Simon to speak.

His words will be about River or perhaps Kaylee. They will come haltingly, and he will move his hands as he speaks, his pale fingers making shadows on the dull luster of Serenity’s steel walls.

Sometimes, as now, River will interrupt Simon’s monologue. She slides around the door, balanced impossibly on her toes, then collapses onto the floor. Inara and Simon move to catch her at the same time, and their arms tangle in the emptiness above her body.


~ ~ ~

Sometimes, when Serenity stops on a moon closer to the Core, Inara buys a burlap sack full of onions, a thick slab of strong cheese, and loaves of stale bread. Then she and Shepherd Book slice the onions so thinly she can read the maker’s mark on her knife through their concentric rings.

Inara’s eyes water, and she wipes them on the sleeve of her kimono, or else the finely woven handkerchief the Shepherd tucks beneath her bracelet with gentle fingers. His eyes water as well; they both look as if they are grieving a loss, but the galley is loud with their laughter and the metallic noises of their knives working.

Inara coats the skillet with rendered fat, and the onions’ acrid bite turns rich and sweet in the recycled air.

~ ~ ~

Inara watches as Mal twirls Kaylee around the galley. She’s singing something Inara doesn’t recognize, but it sounds old. Maybe something from Earth-that-was. In any case, the melody is simple, and Kaylee’s voice is high and clear. Mal’s eyes crinkle, the way they always do when he smiles at Kaylee, and he joins in the song. River peeks around the corner, and Kaylee lets her cut in when she and Mal make their second turn around the table.

Inara waits until they pass to leave her seat for another cup of tea, but River runs Mal into her two steps from the counter. Inara turns and waits to be asked to dance, but Mal’s hands drop to his sides, and he stops singing. They look at other for a long moment, then Inara turns her back and pours the tea.




~ ~ ~

Inara manages to draw blood with her blade, but before Zoe and Jayne kill Niska’s henchmen, the tallest knocks her legs out from under her. She lands on her forearms, the metal grillwork of the floor scoring deep lines on the soft flesh. She hears gunfire, then the mechanical whirr of Serenity’s ramp raising. She flexes her arms; they hurt less than she expects, and she struggles to sit.

Inara reaches out for the railing, but instead finds Zoe firmly gripping her hand and dragging her to her feet. Zoe nods once and walks down the stairs to the cargo bay to untie Mal. Later, when Simon is wrapping Inara’s wrists, Zoe mentions to the others that Inara’s attack provided the distraction necessary for their escape. Inara blushes, but she doesn’t contradict. Zoe claps her on the back as she leaves the infirmary, and Inara squares her shoulders at the gesture.


~ ~ ~

Inara strokes River’s brow soothingly, but River flinches away.

“It’s too close. Too near. All their hands superimposed on yours. They moan above you, and they say your name, but they don’t touch you. Not really.” River looks as if she might cry; she backs away on the bed and draws up her knees to her chest. Her hair falls over her face, but Inara can see River’s eyes squinched tight and her lips moving as she rocks back and forth.

Inara tries to take her in her arms, but River shrieks and flails wildly. She catches Inara in the mouth with an elbow, splitting her lip.

At dinner, River hesitantly smiles at Inara and offers her a foil-wrapped square of candy. Inara smiles back, too widely, and her chocolate tastes faintly of blood.

Date: 2005-09-20 06:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayne-y-daze.livejournal.com
I'm among the unfortunates who know next to nothing of this world. You have made me adore Inara with little clue as to who she is. And your writing here - maybe the new verse is making you more careful - is even better than normal, and that's not easy to do. This is incredible stuff - I always expect wonderful fic from you, but I am amazed right now.

Date: 2005-09-20 08:21 pm (UTC)
ext_2351: (jayne by aliice)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Oh, no! Next project--Make Rayne a FF fanatic. LOL I think you would really like the show. I hope you get the chance to see it.

Thanks so much for the kind words, esp these: maybe the new verse is making you more careful - is even better than normal. I was so nervous about writing in a new fandom.

*smooches you within an inch of your life*

Date: 2005-09-20 12:45 pm (UTC)
tabaqui: (Default)
From: [personal profile] tabaqui
Ooh, pretty pretty!
I like these, very much.
:)

Date: 2005-09-20 01:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] executrix.livejournal.com
Inspiration, huh? (Pats self on the back.)

This went straight into my bookmarks for much future re-reading. Fabulous. Where have you been all Firefly fics' life?

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Date: 2005-09-20 08:22 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thanks so much, Tabi!

:)

*hugs*

Date: 2005-09-20 03:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shannon730.livejournal.com
That was great. Which just makes me wish my dvds would get here soon. I really need to watch all the episodes again. One a week on SciFi is not often enough. :)

Date: 2005-09-20 08:25 pm (UTC)
ext_2351: (mal by aliice)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thanks, Shannon. I appreciate the kind words. I was nervous about writing this.

I know; my friend is burning the DVDs for me, and I can't wait for them.....or the movie!!!!!!!!!

BTW, I am really enjoying that Buffy/Mal crossover you recommended to me. I got to the end and was all, "No!!!!!! Need next chapter!!! Ahhhhhhhh!" LOL

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Date: 2005-09-20 10:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ex-willsheni31.livejournal.com
I'm almost without words. There are so many delightful moments here. Mal dancing with and smiling at Kaylee... River's gift of chocolate... Wash's excitement over finding something special for Zoe... the emptiness that lies between Inara and Mal, a bridge they can never cross. Such beautiful writing. Wonderfully done!

Date: 2005-09-21 02:55 pm (UTC)
ext_2351: (jayne by aliice)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! I really appreciate the detailed feedback. The vignette between Inara and Mal is the one I feel is the weakest, so I'm really pleased you like that one.

*blushes*

Thanks again!

Date: 2005-09-21 02:48 am (UTC)
ext_56709: (Oscar Wilde)
From: [identity profile] jjjean65.livejournal.com
Wow... just wow. The imagery was perfect. I loved the bit... um I loved all the bits. I would love to see her interaction with Serenity itself, I mean she must have delighted in decorating the shuttle.

Date: 2005-09-21 02:57 pm (UTC)
ext_2351: (serenity by jjjean65)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Heeeee; I realized afterwards that I should have done one with her and Serenity. After all, Serenity is the tenth character.

I'm so glad you like, Jean!

PS I just saw your emails and will get back to you on them ASAP

Date: 2005-09-22 06:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] virtualpersonal.livejournal.com
Wow! You seriously have all of the voices down for the characters. I could see each scene, and hear them say the words. You've depicted their relationships very well, through not only speech, but action and thoughts.

Date: 2005-09-22 06:03 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thanks, Cas! I am always so worried about voice and characterization and am really glad when readers feel I got those right. :)

I really appreciate the positive feedback!

Date: 2005-09-24 05:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] catscorner.livejournal.com
Oh! *voice catches* Wow! That was so... amazing! Inara is the only Firefly character I think I write well and I am just in awe of you. I loved this piece beyond the telling of it. I read it twice.

My favorite of all was the galley dance with Mal. I seriously teared up! With only two short paragraphs you made me tear up!!

Wow... just wow. You have all the voices, behaviors, and mannerisms down to a tee and you put them all together in this lovely little vignette. Please write more!

Would you like to come play on a really fantastic PbEM RPG with me? We really need a Zoe. I know RPGs maybe aren't really your thing... but I really think you could do wonderful things with her... even if you just wanted to try it for a spell. Jayne is also open if you prefer the Hero from Canton. Anyway, it's called Serenity PBEM (http://movies.groups.yahoo.com/group/Serenity_PBEM/). Come take a gander!

[livejournal.com profile] virtualpersonal plays Mal and I play Inara. *tempt tempt*

Date: 2005-09-26 12:21 am (UTC)
ext_2351: (ff hero talk jayne and mal by aliice)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Seriously blushing here! That's two votes for the galley dance scene, which was actually my least favorite. LOL I really appreciate all the kind words. :)

I appreciate the invite to play, but I really don't think I can. I can barely keep up with my flist and running [livejournal.com profile] club_joss. I am, after all, at least supposed to be pretending to work on my disseration. Ha!!!! I'm definitely going to check that out, but I don't have time to participate. It's absolutely lovely for you to think of me, though. :)

*smooch*

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Date: 2005-10-01 05:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kiaforrest.livejournal.com
:: catching breath ::

another vote for the dancing captain tightpants moment here! Inara's response or lack of - is probably Why it grabs us? They keep most of their 'fussing' private (they think). Plus, her enjoyment of the light moment among the daily life is genuine in this piece. She doesn't have to be the 'center of the 'verse' to be centered comes through in each little glimpse of her.

Shiny!

Date: 2005-10-01 07:15 pm (UTC)
ext_2351: (jayne by aliice)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! I'm incredibly flattered by all the kind words. I have certainly gotten a great reception into my new favorite fandom. :)

Thanks again.

Date: 2005-10-01 06:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tartsweetheart.livejournal.com
This was just perfect.

Also, I randomly love the Simon vignette. For some reason it struck me more than the rest.

Date: 2005-10-01 07:16 pm (UTC)
ext_2351: (girl footsie by jjjean65)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thanks so much! I really liked that one myself. I wanted to show that Simon really isn't doing anything but grasping at nothing with his efforts to fix River. I'm glad that one worked for you. :)

Thanks again!

Date: 2005-10-02 04:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] katinka31.livejournal.com
Wow wow wow...this is extremely well-written. All of the voices and scenarios ring true. :)

Date: 2005-10-02 05:19 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! I can't believe what a positive response I'm getting to this piece. *goes all giddy*

:)

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Date: 2005-10-02 11:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sanguinary.livejournal.com
Came here via a list of recs (via the Cortext). Most of the time when I read Inara fic, I'm always disapointed because it seems that I was watching a different Inara than everyone else. However, this fic? I am very impressed with. You've got everyone's voices and mannerisms nailed just so right and it's incredibly easy to visualize it, the dancing, the crying while laughing with Book, Wash's excitement. And it's a fic that makes me actually care for, and about, Inara while letting her stay who she is.

Date: 2005-10-03 12:08 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
I just found the Cortext myself; isn't that a great comm? Every fandom needs a version of that.

I'm so glad you find this version of Inara close to the one you saw on the screen. Inara is actually the character I'm the most uncomfortable with in the series. I like her, very much, but she confounds me some, as Kaylee would say. She's very layered.

I very much appreciate your feedback. It's really nice to hear such good words today. :)

Date: 2005-10-25 07:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hermionesviolin.livejournal.com
Aww, this is really nice, esp. with River contriving things to get Inara and various crew members together :)

Ouch to the end of the Mal-Inara snippet.

I love the last one -- with River reacting to all the clients who are in a way a part of Inara and then the wonderful blood-chocolate image at the every end. So perfect.

Date: 2005-10-26 05:38 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thank you so much. You've made an otherwise annoying day much better with your lovely words.

:)

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Feedback: Touched

Date: 2007-02-27 07:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] carmarthen.livejournal.com
Found this via a rec somewhere.

I love seeing the differences (and similarities) in Inara's interactions with the other crew members (especially Wash and Zoe). All the voices are excellent, but I think my favorite part is

“She’s just insanely hard to buy for. At some point, a man has to move beyond the traditional birthday gift basket of daggers and assorted grenades.” Wash sighs and slouches back in the pilot’s chair. “I just want to get her something different this year.”

Hee!

Re: Feedback: Touched

Date: 2007-02-27 09:42 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thank you so much. I really appreciate the feedback. :) It's so nice to know that people are still reading fic I wrote a while back.

*hugs*

Date: 2007-05-13 04:16 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thelastgoodname.livejournal.com
Wow, I really like this; there is so much more here than what you wrote, and the spaces in between are lovely and powerful.

Date: 2007-05-13 05:05 pm (UTC)
ext_2351: (kaylee and inara hug by carrielh)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thanks so much, TLGN. :) I'm really pleased that you like this piece. This was one of the first "grown up" pieces of fanfic I wrote (where I was concerned much more with character than trying to write a hot sex scene that would explode the internets (which has yet to occur, btw, LOL)), and I have a lot of fondness for it.

:)
From: [identity profile] scratchingpost1.livejournal.com
Your story or fanart has been nominated at the Serenity on the Hellmouth Awards. If you would like the story (or fanart) to be nominated, please let me know. Information on the nomination is listed below. I will not list it without a reply from you.

Also, please check the username and URL listed below and let me know if I need to make any changes.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Michelle -- http://community.livejournal.com/sothawards/
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Touched, or Eight Fragments (http://lunabee34.livejournal.com/44205.html) (Lorraine)
Nominated For: Inara

Five Rather Nasty and Sadistic Things that Never Happened to Simon Tam (http://lunabee34.livejournal.com/52756.html) (Lorraine)
Nominated For: Simon
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I accept the nomination. :)

Date: 2007-12-12 12:51 am (UTC)
ext_2351: (Default)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Oh, wow. I am so pleased to be nominated. Thank you for letting me know.

Date: 2008-03-06 12:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] invisibleshrew.livejournal.com
Ah, these are just lovely, Dramatic and domestic both, they're a lovely patchwork look at Inara and the crew. Book and the fried onions is my favourite for no good reason at all, except that I love your image of the two of the laughing happily through tears, but Zoe and Wash's very different worlds are gorgeous too. Also, this :

“She's just insanely hard to buy for. At some point, a man has to move beyond the traditional birthday gift basket of daggers and assorted grenades.”

pretty much made my day.

Date: 2008-03-08 04:11 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Oh, brilliant. Brilliant. You have made my day. Made my day.

I am so so so pleased that something I wrote so long ago is still being read.

Thank you immensely for such lovely feedback.

Date: 2008-03-17 10:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] odette-river.livejournal.com
Oh man, I love these. I'd forgotten how much I like Inara. Thank you!

Date: 2008-03-18 02:14 am (UTC)
ext_2351: (Default)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thank you so much!!!!! What a lovely thing to find in the inbox.

Date: 2008-03-17 11:04 pm (UTC)
ext_14768: (serenity ship by tonic2w_iconage)
From: [identity profile] itsaslashything.livejournal.com
This is lovely. I've long thought there were depths to Inara that were'nt allowed to fully flesh out in the short lived series. And that is such a shame, and she's tough as steel yet full of grace. Thanks for sharing this with us!

Date: 2008-03-18 02:16 am (UTC)
ext_2351: (Default)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thank you so very much for such wonderful feedback. :) I love when one of my older pieces gets feedback.

:)

Date: 2009-06-06 03:47 am (UTC)
ext_1310: (i know where beauty lives)
From: [identity profile] musesfool.livejournal.com
This is lovely.

Date: 2009-06-15 06:27 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thank you so very much.

*big grin*

Date: 2009-06-10 09:23 pm (UTC)
ext_9352: (Default)
From: [identity profile] charlie-d-blue.livejournal.com
Oh, this was just gorgeous!

Date: 2009-06-15 06:27 pm (UTC)
ext_2351: (Default)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
Thank you!

*blushes*

Date: 2010-06-27 04:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] possibly-thrice.livejournal.com
I love this so much. The way you describe things is wonderful, you know, the spare details enough to convey beauty in all the right places-- reading the maker's mark on knives through the onion rings, for god's sake, and songs, sounding old, it's all so clear, and I can hear Inara in this like a bell.

Also:

“She’s just insanely hard to buy for. At some point, a man has to move beyond the traditional birthday gift basket of daggers and assorted grenades.”

WASH ILU SO MUCH AAAAGH

Yeah.

Date: 2010-07-10 03:00 pm (UTC)
ext_2351: (firefly unzipped by jjjean65)
From: [identity profile] lunabee34.livejournal.com
*beams*

Best. Feedback. Ever.

What a lovely thing to find in the inbox.

Thank you, sweetpea.

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